The majority of the feedback I received on my first elevator pitch was very positive. The only two negatives I received was the concern about high prices since it is a boutique and that I used too many filler words in my pitch. In this elevator pitch, I addressed that my prices would be low even though it's a boutique. I also tried to use less filler words in my pitch.
Caroline this a great idea! I like how that it isn't the ordinary clothing boutique but it sounds like you really want to create an experience for the customer to enjoy. I think you have a great target audience and I could envision mothers and daughters taking trips to your tea room quite often! You had great energy in your pitch and were very informative. The only suggestion I really have for you is to maybe make more eye contact with your camera. I feel like if you did this it would make it seem more directed at the viewer. I learned through feedback on my pitch that I moved around way too much and some people said I distracted from my pitch. You can check out my blog here: http://buschuf.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-pitch-no-2-stud-ease.html
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ReplyDeleteI think your idea is fantastic. Your pitch was natural and there weren’t many filler words. Our pitches are really similar actually. In my pitch, I discuss a clothing company that caters to the range of sizes from really small to really large sizes. The difference in our pitches is that your boutique is going to be a one-stop shop that is going to have other items in addition to clothes.
You can check out my elevator pitch at http://entrepreneurshipblogs.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-pitch-no-2.html
Caroline,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed your pitch! You were super positive and confident the whole way through! I think that your idea is unique and that the many different facets and departments of your store will help you to capture a broader audience. Since we do have to give feedback and try to give you something to work on... I would say one way to tweak your pitch a little, is when you are talking about your store, instead of saying "they", say "we". This is super nit-picky, but I think that it would make your idea more personal and you would come off as more of a part of it. Overall, your pitch was really great! Feel free to check out my blog at: http://uffarmer.blogspot.com/
This is a good pitch. Your idea to diversify the shop is a great one. It take a little of the risk out, because you're not just selling one thing. I am not a boutique shopper, so I'm not sure exactly what kind of competition you would face in this market, but from my perspective this seems like a good plan.
ReplyDeleteyou can see my pitch here: http://kjent3003.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-pitch-no-2.html
Your idea is interesting as it creates a high end shopping experience for everyone. Having different sections will also help bring in more customers. You came off as very confident in your pitch and made it seem like you really were talking to a room full of people, rather than just your camera. You had a few filler words still, but overall the pitch was very good. Check out my blog at: http://ryanent3003.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-pitch-no-2.html.
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